Machinery Destroy my self esteem!

Destroy my self esteem! · 05:26 PM

Go for it try and make me to kill my self, tell me every thing that is wrong with this shot.

You know you want to!

Dom · 11-22-2009, 06:04 PM

Grow some and tell me what's wrong with my shot!

Does please help?

Fixcinater · 11-22-2009, 06:43 PM

-It looks like you're taking a shot of another photographer shooting the tracks/what is on them.
-The top being so black is a very static empty space.
-The only motion through the frame is via the tracks, and it leads to darkness.
-Rocks look unsharp in web sized JPG.
-Not a very exciting perspective.
-Overall, it's a pretty boring shot of a boring scene, and it doesn't make me feel anything.

graphicgr8s · 11-22-2009, 08:34 PM

It's a shot of train stuff. I like it. Different perspective. Well done.

Damn Brit · 11-22-2009, 08:57 PM

Try putting it in Photo Critique next time you want critique.

**Ash** · 11-22-2009, 09:07 PM

What is that fellow doing at the top there with a ?flashlight in his hand?

Indeed it's hard to grasp the idea of the shot, although it's clear it's of a dark railway scene.
The cart seems to be the focus of attention but there's not enough of it to draw my attention.

Technically it's a well executed shot with good use of off-camera lighting and perspective, but I'm left wondering what to make of it.

A good result nonetheless.

Tommy · 11-23-2009, 12:00 AM

I kinda like the color of the waggon against the grey surroundings, but the other person in the top right corner is distracting. Is that a bicycle helmet he is wearing? Just get rid of his head (in photo post processing only of course) and move his light a little to the left to make it look like the light is coming from a train coming towards you on the tracks. Try cloning the light to make it a dual light and see what works best. I think it would make the image more interesting.

/Tommy

keyser · 11-23-2009, 12:35 AM

Heh, tearing people down to size isn't something I get to do very often! Ok... the light in the tunnel is distracting & the top of the photo is too black.

The interest in this scene is the texture of the rock and the worn texture of the tracks and the metal frame of the bogie. I'd love to see a tighter crop of the wagon

**Sailor** · 11-23-2009, 07:01 AM

Don't jump of any bridges; I think it's a neat shot. I might crop a bit off the left (having recently been reminded by JIMBO of the usefulness of even minor cropping).

I think it's cool and clever.

Jer

11-22-2009, 06:04 PM	#2
Dom Guest	Grow some and tell me what's wrong with my shot! Does please help?

11-22-2009, 06:43 PM	#3
Fixcinater Veteran Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: San Diego, CA, USA Posts: 409	-It looks like you're taking a shot of another photographer shooting the tracks/what is on them. -The top being so black is a very static empty space. -The only motion through the frame is via the tracks, and it leads to darkness. -Rocks look unsharp in web sized JPG. -Not a very exciting perspective. -Overall, it's a pretty boring shot of a boring scene, and it doesn't make me feel anything.

11-22-2009, 08:34 PM	#4
graphicgr8s Guest	It's a shot of train stuff. I like it. Different perspective. Well done.

11-22-2009, 08:57 PM	#5
Damn Brit Guest	Try putting it in Photo Critique next time you want critique.

11-22-2009, 09:07 PM	#6
Ash Loyal Site Supporter Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Toowoomba, Queensland Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 23,920	What is that fellow doing at the top there with a ?flashlight in his hand? Indeed it's hard to grasp the idea of the shot, although it's clear it's of a dark railway scene. The cart seems to be the focus of attention but there's not enough of it to draw my attention. Technically it's a well executed shot with good use of off-camera lighting and perspective, but I'm left wondering what to make of it. A good result nonetheless.

11-23-2009, 12:00 AM	#7
Tommy Senior Member Join Date: May 2008 Location: Stockholm, Sweden Photos: Gallery Posts: 195	I kinda like the color of the waggon against the grey surroundings, but the other person in the top right corner is distracting. Is that a bicycle helmet he is wearing? Just get rid of his head (in photo post processing only of course) and move his light a little to the left to make it look like the light is coming from a train coming towards you on the tracks. Try cloning the light to make it a dual light and see what works best. I think it would make the image more interesting. /Tommy

11-23-2009, 12:35 AM	#8
keyser Veteran Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Tsawwassen, BC Posts: 376	Heh, tearing people down to size isn't something I get to do very often! Ok... the light in the tunnel is distracting & the top of the photo is too black. The interest in this scene is the texture of the rock and the worn texture of the tracks and the metal frame of the bogie. I'd love to see a tighter crop of the wagon

11-23-2009, 07:01 AM	#9
Sailor Loyal Site Supporter Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Coastal Texas Photos: Gallery Posts: 26,205	Don't jump of any bridges; I think it's a neat shot. I might crop a bit off the left (having recently been reminded by JIMBO of the usefulness of even minor cropping). I think it's cool and clever. Jer