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first bikini model shoot · 12:00 PM

first model shoot! for a pool company... c&c if you could
thank you!

scott
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**Ash** · 03-22-2010, 12:27 PM

Fine locale, Scott.
Nice bright images with lots of life.
My impression is that these images are good, but 'raw' (not so 'clean') and overdone with the arrangement. The scenes are quite busy and make it difficult to hone in on the one important subject in each image.

#1 has too much of a wide angle shown by the distorted look of the woman in the top right of the frame.
#2 features a provocative pose (?suitable for the client) and is distracted by the background busyness of the scene.
#3 has too many backs in the image.
#4 appears cluttered and not the best framed with that distracting pole on the left side.
Otherwise a pleasant series.

lesmore49 · 03-22-2010, 02:00 PM

I agree with Ash. Also one photo shows tattoos on a couple of the people. I know tattoos are not uncommon, but they can be a polarizing issue for some (not me).

Given that the pix are for adverts and you want to appeal to as much of the consumer market as possible, I would suggest angles which avoid the tattoos .

I used to work at a publishing company and we reviewed potential advertising for different magazines.

If people were in the advert...we always needed to remember that the advert had to focus on what the advertiser wanted to promote....in this case I believe the pool.

So the people should be the secondary focus...the attributes of the product (pool) have to be the main focus.

I agree with Ash that some of the pictures maybe construed as too focused on some of the models, by some of the potential consumers.

Again advertising has to appeal to all... or at least the great majority of the consumers the ad is aimed.

Kryosphinx · 03-22-2010, 02:25 PM

I'm no pro, but from a more "consumer" point of view, I'd say these shots (especially the first two) are too "artsy."

What I mean by that is the elements in your pictures are too interesting and draw too much attention from the pool.

In the first one, my eye was drawn to that gorgeously swirled, bright blue, and in-focus drink.

And in the second one, well, I'm a dude...

In short, I'd say these would be pretty good if you wanted to say something like, "Hey, look at my models," instead of, "Hey, look at my pool."

devisor · 03-22-2010, 02:34 PM

with arrangment like this, you should do more pp to them, so the individual stands out more from the environment they are in now. It's a bit flat. I think they can be pritty cool with the right pp work.

burnie · 03-22-2010, 02:44 PM

Hey... thanks for the comments! The pool company's adv. rep actually set up the models how he wanted them. They were looking for lifestyle shots- people enjoying the pool. They actually showed me pictures of what they didn't want... shots focusing on the pool.. they wanted the pool to be secondary!

burnie · 03-22-2010, 02:48 PM

Originally posted by lesmore49

I agree with Ash. Also one photo shows tattoos on a couple of the people. I know tattoos are not uncommon, but they can be a polarizing issue for some (not me).

Given that the pix are for adverts and you want to appeal to as much of the consumer market as possible, I would suggest angles which avoid the tattoos .

I used to work at a publishing company and we reviewed potential advertising for different magazines.

If people were in the advert...we always needed to remember that the advert had to focus on what the advertiser wanted to promote....in this case I believe the pool.

So the people should be the secondary focus...the attributes of the product (pool) have to be the main focus.

I agree with Ash that some of the pictures maybe construed as too focused on some of the models, by some of the potential consumers.

Again advertising has to appeal to all... or at least the great majority of the consumers the ad is aimed.

They actually wanted to make sure that i got the tattos in the shot!!?
thanks
scott

lesmore49 · 03-22-2010, 03:29 PM

Originally posted by burnie

They actually wanted to make sure that i got the tattos in the shot!!?
thanks
scott

Well then you did the right thing...as someone contracted to them.....you gave the company what they want, as they are paying the bills.

fractal · 03-22-2010, 03:45 PM

Very enjoyable series. Although, I feel the need to have a gin & tonic more so than purchase a pool.

burnie · 03-23-2010, 12:05 PM

all... thanks for looking and comments!

scott

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03-22-2010, 12:27 PM	#2
Ash Loyal Site Supporter Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Toowoomba, Queensland Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 23,920	Fine locale, Scott. Nice bright images with lots of life. My impression is that these images are good, but 'raw' (not so 'clean') and overdone with the arrangement. The scenes are quite busy and make it difficult to hone in on the one important subject in each image. #1 has too much of a wide angle shown by the distorted look of the woman in the top right of the frame. #2 features a provocative pose (?suitable for the client) and is distracted by the background busyness of the scene. #3 has too many backs in the image. #4 appears cluttered and not the best framed with that distracting pole on the left side. Otherwise a pleasant series.

03-22-2010, 02:00 PM	#3
lesmore49 Pentaxian Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Western Canada Posts: 12,350	I agree with Ash. Also one photo shows tattoos on a couple of the people. I know tattoos are not uncommon, but they can be a polarizing issue for some (not me). Given that the pix are for adverts and you want to appeal to as much of the consumer market as possible, I would suggest angles which avoid the tattoos . I used to work at a publishing company and we reviewed potential advertising for different magazines. If people were in the advert...we always needed to remember that the advert had to focus on what the advertiser wanted to promote....in this case I believe the pool. So the people should be the secondary focus...the attributes of the product (pool) have to be the main focus. I agree with Ash that some of the pictures maybe construed as too focused on some of the models, by some of the potential consumers. Again advertising has to appeal to all... or at least the great majority of the consumers the ad is aimed.

03-22-2010, 02:25 PM	#4
Kryosphinx Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Milwaukee Posts: 129	I'm no pro, but from a more "consumer" point of view, I'd say these shots (especially the first two) are too "artsy." What I mean by that is the elements in your pictures are too interesting and draw too much attention from the pool. In the first one, my eye was drawn to that gorgeously swirled, bright blue, and in-focus drink. And in the second one, well, I'm a dude... In short, I'd say these would be pretty good if you wanted to say something like, "Hey, look at my models," instead of, "Hey, look at my pool."

03-22-2010, 02:34 PM	#5
devisor Veteran Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Norway Photos: Gallery Posts: 1,470	with arrangment like this, you should do more pp to them, so the individual stands out more from the environment they are in now. It's a bit flat. I think they can be pritty cool with the right pp work.

03-22-2010, 02:44 PM	#6
burnie Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: southern california Posts: 220 Original Poster	Hey... thanks for the comments! The pool company's adv. rep actually set up the models how he wanted them. They were looking for lifestyle shots- people enjoying the pool. They actually showed me pictures of what they didn't want... shots focusing on the pool.. they wanted the pool to be secondary!

03-22-2010, 02:48 PM	#7
burnie Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: southern california Posts: 220 Original Poster	Originally posted by lesmore49 I agree with Ash. Also one photo shows tattoos on a couple of the people. I know tattoos are not uncommon, but they can be a polarizing issue for some (not me). Given that the pix are for adverts and you want to appeal to as much of the consumer market as possible, I would suggest angles which avoid the tattoos . I used to work at a publishing company and we reviewed potential advertising for different magazines. If people were in the advert...we always needed to remember that the advert had to focus on what the advertiser wanted to promote....in this case I believe the pool. So the people should be the secondary focus...the attributes of the product (pool) have to be the main focus. I agree with Ash that some of the pictures maybe construed as too focused on some of the models, by some of the potential consumers. Again advertising has to appeal to all... or at least the great majority of the consumers the ad is aimed. They actually wanted to make sure that i got the tattos in the shot!!? thanks scott

03-22-2010, 03:29 PM	#8
lesmore49 Pentaxian Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Western Canada Posts: 12,350	Originally posted by burnie They actually wanted to make sure that i got the tattos in the shot!!? thanks scott Well then you did the right thing...as someone contracted to them.....you gave the company what they want, as they are paying the bills.

03-22-2010, 03:45 PM	#9
fractal Inactive Account Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Melbourne Photos: Gallery Posts: 3,547	Very enjoyable series. Although, I feel the need to have a gin & tonic more so than purchase a pool.

03-23-2010, 12:05 PM	#10
burnie Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: southern california Posts: 220 Original Poster	all... thanks for looking and comments! scott

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