Black & White still life "lens"

jasonadams · 06-07-2010, 08:01 PM

working with hot lights at school

Last edited by jasonadams; 07-17-2010 at 01:31 PM.

Adam · 06-08-2010, 08:31 AM

A good attempt with great lighting, but the composition doesn't work IMO.

jasonadams · 06-10-2010, 07:35 PM

What would you have done differently? I have to say i like this photo because of the composition. The filters in the foreground are set out to draw you eye back to the subject in a nice gradual curve. I feel that the beauty is it's simplicity.

Gaelen · 06-10-2010, 07:40 PM

I'm with Adam on this one. Generally for me composition tells a story, this is just missing something to complete the story.

If the lens was further top right and more of the filters were in focus and possibly with a bit more detail in them it might show something more dramatic. But as it is.... It's just not jumping out at me.

unixrevolution · 06-11-2010, 07:56 AM

I agree...I would move the filters back with the lens, and get them partially or mostly in focus. The head-on shot of the lens doesn't work for me either, I'd have done a little angling on it to get along the lens barrel, and perhaps off-center the lens in the frame a little more.

jasonadams · 06-13-2010, 08:40 AM

Originally posted by Gaelen

I'm with Adam on this one. Generally for me composition tells a story, this is just missing something to complete the story.

If the lens was further top right and more of the filters were in focus and possibly with a bit more detail in them it might show something more dramatic. But as it is.... It's just not jumping out at me.

I agree with the fact that perhaps the lens could be moved to a different spot to make it more appealing to the eye. However, I disagree that a composition must have a story. Sometimes a photo just simply is. Taking a macro of a bunch of pencils lined up forms no narrative but that doesn’t detract from it potential to be a great photo. There are a million macro shots of flowers on this site alone that would prove my point. Thanks for all your insights though. I have some other negs from this shoot and I will have to see If I can pop off a couple of prints that might be a little more to your liking. Thanks

06-07-2010, 08:01 PM	#1
jasonadams Inactive Account Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: nebraska Posts: 38	still life "lens" Lens: 28mm Camera: k1000 Photo Location: mcc ISO: 400 working with hot lights at school Last edited by jasonadams; 07-17-2010 at 01:31 PM.

06-08-2010, 08:31 AM	#2
Adam Administrator Site Webmaster Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Arizona Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 51,608	A good attempt with great lighting, but the composition doesn't work IMO. Adam PentaxForums.com Webmaster (Site Usage Guide \| Site Help \| My Photography) PentaxForums.com server and development costs are user-supported. You can help cover these costs by donating or purchasing one of our Pentax eBooks. Or, buy your photo gear from our affiliates, Adorama, B&H Photo, KEH, or Topaz Labs, and get FREE Marketplace access - click here to see how! Trusted Pentax retailers:

06-13-2010, 08:40 AM	#6
jasonadams Inactive Account Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: nebraska Posts: 38 Original Poster	Originally posted by Gaelen I'm with Adam on this one. Generally for me composition tells a story, this is just missing something to complete the story. If the lens was further top right and more of the filters were in focus and possibly with a bit more detail in them it might show something more dramatic. But as it is.... It's just not jumping out at me. I agree with the fact that perhaps the lens could be moved to a different spot to make it more appealing to the eye. However, I disagree that a composition must have a story. Sometimes a photo just simply is. Taking a macro of a bunch of pencils lined up forms no narrative but that doesn’t detract from it potential to be a great photo. There are a million macro shots of flowers on this site alone that would prove my point. Thanks for all your insights though. I have some other negs from this shoot and I will have to see If I can pop off a couple of prints that might be a little more to your liking. Thanks Last edited by jasonadams; 06-13-2010 at 09:29 AM.

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06-10-2010, 07:35 PM	#3
jasonadams Inactive Account Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: nebraska Posts: 38 Original Poster	What would you have done differently? I have to say i like this photo because of the composition. The filters in the foreground are set out to draw you eye back to the subject in a nice gradual curve. I feel that the beauty is it's simplicity.

06-10-2010, 07:40 PM	#4
Gaelen Veteran Member Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Coquitlam, BC, Canada Photos: Gallery Posts: 749	I'm with Adam on this one. Generally for me composition tells a story, this is just missing something to complete the story. If the lens was further top right and more of the filters were in focus and possibly with a bit more detail in them it might show something more dramatic. But as it is.... It's just not jumping out at me.

06-11-2010, 07:56 AM	#5
unixrevolution Veteran Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Waldorf, MD Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 1,861	I agree...I would move the filters back with the lens, and get them partially or mostly in focus. The head-on shot of the lens doesn't work for me either, I'd have done a little angling on it to get along the lens barrel, and perhaps off-center the lens in the frame a little more.