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06-26-2010, 11:34 PM   #1
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Finally...first commission. Sorta.
Lens: 16-50mm Camera: K200D ISO: 200 Shutter Speed: 1/30s Aperture: F4.5 

Here is my first...commission. Sort of. If commissions were free Its a TFCD, and I am trying my best to put both of us in a good light please comment. There are 4 or 5 picture in the series. As i get through them in PP, they will be added to the board .

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06-27-2010, 06:46 AM   #2
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Just curious as to what hockey has to do with the tub of promasil? Whatever promasil is?
06-27-2010, 09:32 AM   #3
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Ah. lol, i forget this one does need a backstory. He is an athlete seeking sponsorship from a supplement company. So there is the connection
06-27-2010, 07:26 PM   #4
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If this is to sell promasil then the bucket needs turning so that the name is more prominate.

nice shot otherwize

06-27-2010, 07:55 PM   #5

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The frame is a bit tight for my liking, I'd like to see more space at the handle end and the other end of the stick and his belly not coming out of the frame.

I like the PP toning of the player but not a fan of the selective colouring of the bucket (but that's the point of the shot so I'll go back in my hole now).

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06-27-2010, 10:44 PM   #6
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Hahah Thanks for the critiques. I agree, the name should have been more prominent, and the tight cropping is a shame . Its because I didnt have space to work with, both my umbrella and strobe was on either side of the model : small room. Its noted though, next time i should ask for a bigger room.
06-27-2010, 11:39 PM   #7
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Quite nice, agree with the actual product be more emphasized - but not too much, maybe it is quite nice that the viewer has to look for it and it's not in it's face .

Agree also on the tight framing, should have been more space around.

Overall, striking photo, nice model and nice pose. I think that the marketing at that company will have a look on them


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