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09-20-2010, 11:50 AM   #1
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I'm interested in honest critique's of this shot. I think it may be a bit too heavy in contrast and blown out somewhat... but I am very all new to this. I shot in RAW+ and this is the straight .jpg from the camera. I didn't want to start changing anything until I got a few first impressions. Thank You.

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09-20-2010, 04:06 PM   #2
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The technicals in this shot are fine and quite secondary to the larger issue of whether this image communicates "aloneness."


A good test is to ask yourself how dire the title is needed to get your message across. To me it looks like a young boy playing on the beach.


I would say it does not quite work because it lacks cues that convey that reality, and really, that feeling of being alone. We cannot see enough of his face to discern his emotional state. The field of view is so tight that I cannot tell if he is the only one of the beach. Indeed, the vastness of the beach is a question mark.

It's a nice attempt but an easy one to experiment with in a few ways.

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QuoteOriginally posted by Miguel Quote
The technicals in this shot are fine and quite secondary to the larger issue of whether this image communicates "aloneness."


A good test is to ask yourself how dire the title is needed to get your message across. To me it looks like a young boy playing on the beach.


I would say it does not quite work because it lacks cues that convey that reality, and really, that feeling of being alone. We cannot see enough of his face to discern his emotional state. The field of view is so tight that I cannot tell if he is the only one of the beach. Indeed, the vastness of the beach is a question mark.

It's a nice attempt but an easy one to experiment with in a few ways.

M
Very good feedback - and makes perfect sense. You are right 100% - if the picture wasn't shot so tight, perhaps showing a background of nothing behind him - no sign of civilization that title would work better.

So setting the title aside for a moment ... I would appreciate any more comments on the technical side of the picture... blown out? contrast, etc.

thanks!
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Call me a heretic but the title would work if the frame were cropped square around the subject. Not alone as in abject despair but alone as in time to himself to reflect. I can't see anything wrong with the exposure.

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You are welcome.
The technicals are just fine. Exposure is good. Color on my calibrated IPS monitor is very pleasant.

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I'm not a professional by any means, but enjoy post-processing. Here's a couple ideas:

The picture can be a bit more interesting with a tight crop on the subject, to remove the attention from the rocks in the background and put the kid's eyes and hands inside the thirds. It could use some color balance, as the predominant tone there is yellow (sand, skin, blonde hair). Also, a sharpness filter to make those water drops and sand pop. Here's a quick attempt:


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This edited crop is definitely more appealing.
Consider composition, colour balance and perspective in your shots and you may find your results becoming better with practice.
The child's pose is not all that intriguing and not telling much of a story IMO.
This is yet another important consideration when trying to capture compelling portraits.
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Yes I like this cropped version much better as well.

I think because I know this boys personality, I read into the image more. He's a VERY quiet child who seems deep in thought a lot.

I'll play around with it someone. Thank you everyone for the feedback!

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I guess we are all different - i prefer a B+W conversion on this, and crop so the child has more ' breathing space ' in the photo in the direction he's facing.


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i like the BW crop looks great! its cool how removing color can make an image better.
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Love the sepia square crop.
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A suggestion for next time, if you are going for an alone feeling, try using a lot of negative space (if possible) and putting things in B&W, that tends to make the image slightly colder and less "cheery" imo. The negative space helps covey the aloneness.
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