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Hambino · 12-04-2010, 07:42 PM

Original .jpg

B&W

I really like this shot but here are some things I would do differently:
1. Spend a bit more time trying to focus it
2. I'm not sure if I really like his actual arm being in the bottom left.

What do you guys think? Super noob and I see lots of neat things (at least they're neat to me!) over here in japan and I'm trying to get better at capturing them with my camera

Thanks!

Last edited by Hambino; 12-05-2010 at 02:28 AM.

Adam · 12-05-2010, 12:34 AM

There definitely needs to be more contrast in the BW version. Also, I agree- the lower-left tills the whole photo. 3/5.

jolepp · 12-05-2010, 01:09 AM

I think the blurry horizontal lines give a sense of movement that is consistent with the scene. The bit of the actual arm lets one see that this is really a reflection, then again its sharpness stands out akwardly ... more of the man in the frame might work better, but with this cropping a slice off on the left would seem to result in a nicer image. At any rate you would seem to have an eye for an artsy snap that is worth cultivating :-)

Hambino · 12-05-2010, 02:39 AM

Originally posted by jolepp

At any rate you would seem to have an eye for an artsy snap that is worth cultivating :-)

wow, thanks! I don't know that "artsy" and I have ever been in the same sentence but I'm definitely diggin' it

So, given the feedback here's what I've come up with:

Better? I definitely like it better.

Thanks, guys!

12-04-2010, 07:42 PM	#1
Hambino Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: Japan Photos: Albums Posts: 201	Reflection on a Train Lens: DA 35mm f/2.4 Camera: K-r Photo Location: Keikyu YokosukaChuo Line ISO: 800 Shutter Speed: 1/6s Aperture: F4 Original .jpg B&W I really like this shot but here are some things I would do differently: 1. Spend a bit more time trying to focus it 2. I'm not sure if I really like his actual arm being in the bottom left. What do you guys think? Super noob and I see lots of neat things (at least they're neat to me!) over here in japan and I'm trying to get better at capturing them with my camera Thanks! Last edited by Hambino; 12-05-2010 at 02:28 AM.

12-05-2010, 12:34 AM	#2
Adam Administrator Site Webmaster Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Arizona Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 51,608	There definitely needs to be more contrast in the BW version. Also, I agree- the lower-left tills the whole photo. 3/5. Adam PentaxForums.com Webmaster (Site Usage Guide \| Site Help \| My Photography) PentaxForums.com server and development costs are user-supported. You can help cover these costs by donating or purchasing one of our Pentax eBooks. Or, buy your photo gear from our affiliates, Adorama, B&H Photo, KEH, or Topaz Labs, and get FREE Marketplace access - click here to see how! Trusted Pentax retailers:

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12-05-2010, 01:09 AM	#3
jolepp Veteran Member Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Finland Photos: Albums Posts: 3,196	I think the blurry horizontal lines give a sense of movement that is consistent with the scene. The bit of the actual arm lets one see that this is really a reflection, then again its sharpness stands out akwardly ... more of the man in the frame might work better, but with this cropping a slice off on the left would seem to result in a nicer image. At any rate you would seem to have an eye for an artsy snap that is worth cultivating :-)

12-05-2010, 02:39 AM	#4
Hambino Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: Japan Photos: Albums Posts: 201 Original Poster	Originally posted by jolepp At any rate you would seem to have an eye for an artsy snap that is worth cultivating :-) wow, thanks! I don't know that "artsy" and I have ever been in the same sentence but I'm definitely diggin' it So, given the feedback here's what I've come up with: Better? I definitely like it better. Thanks, guys!

Streets Reflection on a Train

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