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Michu · 04-07-2012, 12:44 PM

Kheyyy...

Model: Paulina, make up: Hania, greenhouse in Gdansk.

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K-9 · 04-07-2012, 06:54 PM

#1 the green and white blob behind her head is very distracting. Moving your angle one way could have eliminated it, or moving it the other way might have blocked this with the model. Either way, background distractions are important to watch out for when shooting.

#2 the crop at her arms is awkward. Have your makeup artist do something better with her lips -- they look chapped.

#3 the blue in the background and the dark line (not sure what it is) across the guy's left arm is distracting.

Tom Woj · 04-08-2012, 01:11 AM

Nice.

I'd be aware of things like the strand of hair running down her face in the first shot. A bunch of hair covering the face is intentional, one strand looks like an accident. Personally I'd crop a little tighter so theres less negative space at the top and up the saturation so her hair and skin tone is more punchy. What K-9 said about the lips, they do look a little life-less, but its an easy fix in whatever app you use.

Heres my take on the first shot, very quick clone out of the hair (couldn't do the eye but you get the idea) with a bit of pink added to the lips, cropping out the top and with a vignette added. Also added a bit of saturation and played with clarity/softness. But it's all to-taste, nice job.

D4rknezz · 04-09-2012, 12:09 PM

Great colour combos by the way.

I like number 2 best...besides the chapped lips and forehead needs a little smoothing.
What has been said about number 1 and 3...and number 1 and 2 definitely could use a little more colour..she looks a little pale/bluish. Number 3 is the skin tone I'd go for.

Great job.

Michu · 04-10-2012, 02:48 PM

Thank you for your feedback.
As a complement, supplement ...

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Tom Woj · 04-10-2012, 03:28 PM

That last one looks ... creepy ...

**ebahle** · 04-10-2012, 04:19 PM

Originally posted by Tom Woj

That last one looks ... creepy ...

she may just need to eat

D4rknezz · 04-10-2012, 07:55 PM

The strong hand over her shoulder combined with her uncertain/scared/manipulated/controlled look on the pictures tells a story i am not sure i want to hear....

Is it intentional?

Michu · 04-11-2012, 03:38 AM

Yes, the whole was conceived and executed as a series.

**Ash** · 04-11-2012, 06:38 PM

Good idea Michu.
I agree with the hair being a distraction over her face in #1, but #2 is exquisitely executed. Well done with it.
#3 adds a bit of mystery but the strand of green foliage on the right side is a definite distraction, which is nicely corrected in #4.
Good work and concept.

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04-07-2012, 12:44 PM	#1
Michu Forum Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Bydgoszcz Posts: 59	Ginger Lens: DA 55 Camera: K-20D Photo Location: Gdansk, Poland ISO: 100 Aperture: F1.4 Kheyyy... Model: Paulina, make up: Hania, greenhouse in Gdansk. 01. 02. 03.

04-07-2012, 06:54 PM	#2
K-9 Veteran Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: USA Photos: Albums Posts: 1,971	#1 the green and white blob behind her head is very distracting. Moving your angle one way could have eliminated it, or moving it the other way might have blocked this with the model. Either way, background distractions are important to watch out for when shooting. #2 the crop at her arms is awkward. Have your makeup artist do something better with her lips -- they look chapped. #3 the blue in the background and the dark line (not sure what it is) across the guy's left arm is distracting.

04-08-2012, 01:11 AM	#3
Tom Woj Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: Stafford, UK Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 163	Nice. I'd be aware of things like the strand of hair running down her face in the first shot. A bunch of hair covering the face is intentional, one strand looks like an accident. Personally I'd crop a little tighter so theres less negative space at the top and up the saturation so her hair and skin tone is more punchy. What K-9 said about the lips, they do look a little life-less, but its an easy fix in whatever app you use. Heres my take on the first shot, very quick clone out of the hair (couldn't do the eye but you get the idea) with a bit of pink added to the lips, cropping out the top and with a vignette added. Also added a bit of saturation and played with clarity/softness. But it's all to-taste, nice job. Attached Images

04-09-2012, 12:09 PM	#4
D4rknezz Veteran Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Posts: 1,196	Great colour combos by the way. I like number 2 best...besides the chapped lips and forehead needs a little smoothing. What has been said about number 1 and 3...and number 1 and 2 definitely could use a little more colour..she looks a little pale/bluish. Number 3 is the skin tone I'd go for. Great job.

04-10-2012, 02:48 PM	#5
Michu Forum Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Bydgoszcz Posts: 59 Original Poster	Thank you for your feedback. As a complement, supplement ... 04. 05.

04-10-2012, 03:28 PM	#6
Tom Woj Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: Stafford, UK Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 163	That last one looks ... creepy ...

04-10-2012, 04:19 PM	#7
ebahle Site Supporter Join Date: Oct 2011 Location: Northern Michigan Photos: Albums Posts: 364	Originally posted by Tom Woj That last one looks ... creepy ... she may just need to eat

04-10-2012, 07:55 PM	#8
D4rknezz Veteran Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Posts: 1,196	The strong hand over her shoulder combined with her uncertain/scared/manipulated/controlled look on the pictures tells a story i am not sure i want to hear.... Is it intentional?

04-11-2012, 03:38 AM	#9
Michu Forum Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Bydgoszcz Posts: 59 Original Poster	Yes, the whole was conceived and executed as a series.

04-11-2012, 06:38 PM	#10
Ash Loyal Site Supporter Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Toowoomba, Queensland Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 23,920	Good idea Michu. I agree with the hair being a distraction over her face in #1, but #2 is exquisitely executed. Well done with it. #3 adds a bit of mystery but the strand of green foliage on the right side is a definite distraction, which is nicely corrected in #4. Good work and concept.

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