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04-26-2019, 11:09 AM - 8 Likes   #1
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Lens: Visionar 141/1.9 projection lens Camera: Pentax K-1 Photo Location: Vilnius ISO: 400 Shutter Speed: 1/800s Aperture: F1.9 




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Carabez, please read rules of the Critique section before answering here, one which says:

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While I find the subject rendered well, the out of focus area to the left in the foreground is distracting. The overall effect is almost claustrophobic and the narrow and tall framing adds to this effect. Is like to see more shots with this lens to see if this is just the way it renders or if an added aperture (washer maybe?) inserted in the party would improve the effect.

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QuoteOriginally posted by UncleVanya Quote
While I find the subject rendered well, the out of focus area to the left in the foreground is distracting. The overall effect is almost claustrophobic and the narrow and tall framing adds to this effect. Is like to see more shots with this lens to see if this is just the way it renders or if an added aperture (washer maybe?) inserted in the party would improve the effect.
^^^^^^^This^^^^^^^^. Lovely rendering, and the model is quite decorative. Moving the camera to the right a bit and having the model turn slightly might have made this better.
If I was the photographer, I would be hooking up with that model and location again. And probably again and again.
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Carabez, please read rules of the Critique section before answering here, one which says:
Constructive criticism is wellcome, as well as opinions. Thank you

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QuoteOriginally posted by Wheatfield Quote
^^^^^^^This^^^^^^^^. Lovely rendering, and the model is quite decorative. Moving the camera to the right a bit and having the model turn slightly might have made this better.
If I was the photographer, I would be hooking up with that model and location again. And probably again and again.
Thank you, Wheatfield. Sometimes I shoot too close
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Thank you, Wheatfield. Sometimes I shoot too close
You are most welcome. You have a model that is very camera friendly, which is a good thing. It makes it much easier. That particular image, back up a little bit so she has some breathing room, and turn the camera a little to the right and possibly move it a bit to the right as well. That out of focus line at the side is a huge distraction. My personal preference is for in focus foregrounds, just so you know where I am coming from. To my mind, her hand and the stone should be in focus as well.

Assignment, go out and retake that same picture, keeping what Vanya and I have mentioned and see what comes of it. That young lady is one you should be pursuing as a muse.
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The expression of the model is great as is the composition and light in my opinion. The thing that bothers me is that the DOF is too shallow for the pose and moving her hand closer to her would bring it in focus and make it appear smaller.

As I understand the lens you used has no adjustable aperture?

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QuoteOriginally posted by photolady95 Quote
Carabez, please read rules of the Critique section before answering here, one which says
I'm really sorry, let me redeem myself

In western culture, when we look a picture in fact the first thing we do is "scan" tha picture. What we see in the upper left corner is what we seen first.

"Gabriela" shows nothing intesting (a wall edge) in that first quadrant so the next thing we look is the eyes of the model, following the scan secuence.

So I saw first (in a fast stare) a disruptive door entrance in the wall, then I loved the bokeh of what I have seen after, the model... If it was me, I would do the shot again: I would use a plain wall, to acentuate the isulation of the model.
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Use a lens with a diaphragm. They give the shooter more creative freedom. F/1.9 did not work here.
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It's not a high-key , not a low-key. Contrast is insufficient IMO, especially here face isn't bright enough relative to the background. The same photo with better contrast and right level on her face would make her look better.
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I'm really sorry, let me redeem myself

In western culture, when we look a picture in fact the first thing we do is "scan" tha picture. What we see in the upper left corner is what we seen first.

"Gabriela" shows nothing intesting (a wall edge) in that first quadrant so the next thing we look is the eyes of the model, following the scan secuence.

So I saw first (in a fast stare) a disruptive door entrance in the wall, then I loved the bokeh of what I have seen after, the model... If it was me, I would do the shot again: I would use a plain wall, to acentuate the isulation of the model.
Thank you Carabez. That is interesting

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QuoteOriginally posted by UncleVanya Quote
While I find the subject rendered well, the out of focus area to the left in the foreground is distracting. The overall effect is almost claustrophobic and the narrow and tall framing adds to this effect. Is like to see more shots with this lens to see if this is just the way it renders or if an added aperture (washer maybe?) inserted in the party would improve the effect.
Thank you UncleVanya for your thoughts

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QuoteOriginally posted by Drinkkeri Quote
The expression of the model is great as is the composition and light in my opinion. The thing that bothers me is that the DOF is too shallow for the pose and moving her hand closer to her would bring it in focus and make it appear smaller.

As I understand the lens you used has no adjustable aperture?
Thank you.
Yes. This lens has no aperture. It is possible to insert round metal or paper aperture. I sometims use f3.2

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QuoteOriginally posted by desertscape Quote
Use a lens with a diaphragm. They give the shooter more creative freedom. F/1.9 did not work here.
Thank you for advise Desertscape

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QuoteOriginally posted by biz-engineer Quote
It's not a high-key , not a low-key. Contrast is insufficient IMO, especially here face isn't bright enough relative to the background. The same photo with better contrast and right level on her face would make her look better.
Thank you Biz-engineer. I will check whites and blacks.
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