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**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-14-2019, 02:17 PM - **1 Like**

This is a few years old, now, but I have all the RAW files and such and am considering re-editing it, seeking feedback. I went for a really extreme color story with this series (also on flickr), trying to get it very painterly.

mhoule418 · 10-14-2019, 04:01 PM

You had the composition right, but her eyes seems out of focus...

**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-15-2019, 09:17 AM

Originally posted by mhoule418

You had the composition right, but her eyes seems out of focus...

She's, shall we say, rather three dimensional, and that may have contributed to shallow depth of field, but I suspect more it's soft corners from the lens being wide open.

bladerunner6 · 10-15-2019, 09:27 AM - **1 Like**

Originally posted by mhoule418

You had the composition right, but her eyes seems out of focus...

I agree with this.

Leumas · 10-15-2019, 01:18 PM - **1 Like**

I like the composition, and pose. I think the lighting needs improvement. Her chest (while lovely) is the brightest part and therefore the focal point. I'd have used a reflector or speed-light from the right to light her face. If you have a flexible RAW you might be able to in post.

The Squirrel Mafia · 10-15-2019, 01:20 PM

^ Indeed.

**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-15-2019, 01:58 PM

Yeah, I can bring her face up for sure, and reduce the highlights on her chest too, probably, thanks for the feedback! I had forgotten to bring my reflector that day, sadly.

**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-15-2019, 05:45 PM

A bit more like this, then?

Leumas · 10-15-2019, 06:15 PM

Much closer.

Thought there's some color shifting going on with the chest giving it a greenish hue. I'd leave the chest and mostly focus on equalizing the face to match

You're headed the right direction though

**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-15-2019, 07:14 PM - **1 Like**

One more edit.

ChristianRock · 10-19-2019, 10:58 AM

The last edit turned out pretty nice I would say.

I like this style of very saturated colors though I usually don't use it for portraits. But the skin tones turned out nice in your processing.

**kiwi_jono** · 10-19-2019, 01:57 PM

Lovely composition. I largely agree with the comments here, although the rules are flexible and shot may have even worked better if the face was more OOF. But eyes in focus is the usual rule of thumb.

Anyway its a great shot to have and I think with tweaks suggested is still good image.

**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-19-2019, 02:42 PM

Originally posted by ChristianRock

The last edit turned out pretty nice I would say.

I like this style of very saturated colors though I usually don't use it for portraits. But the skin tones turned out nice in your processing.

Thanks, CR!

Originally posted by kiwi_jono

Lovely composition. I largely agree with the comments here, although the rules are flexible and shot may have even worked better if the face was more OOF. But eyes in focus is the usual rule of thumb.

Anyway its a great shot to have and I think with tweaks suggested is still good image.

Thanks so much!

Birk · 10-24-2019, 11:43 AM

I hang between the first and third picture - I found both fantastic!
The first Look makes me say "wow" and it is still so.
The colors, the style.... and the woman makes me forget to look of the sharp ess of her eyes.

Thank you for showing, I'm not often See Portrait-Photos in this way.

Best regards,
Birk

**Archimedes the Dog** · 10-24-2019, 12:01 PM

Originally posted by Birk

I hang between the first and third picture - I found both fantastic!
The first Look makes me say "wow" and it is still so.
The colors, the style.... and the woman makes me forget to look of the sharp ess of her eyes.

Thank you for showing, I'm not often See Portrait-Photos in this way.

Best regards,
Birk

Thank you very much!

10-14-2019, 02:17 PM - 1 Like	#1
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146	Brigetta Lens: HD PENTAX-DA 16-85mm F3.5-5.6 ED DC WR Camera: K-5 Photo Location: San Diego ISO: 200 Shutter Speed: 1/200s Aperture: F4.5 This is a few years old, now, but I have all the RAW files and such and am considering re-editing it, seeking feedback. I went for a really extreme color story with this series (also on flickr), trying to get it very painterly.

10-14-2019, 04:01 PM	#2
mhoule418 Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Quebec city Posts: 228	You had the composition right, but her eyes seems out of focus...

10-15-2019, 09:17 AM	#3
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146 Original Poster	Originally posted by mhoule418 You had the composition right, but her eyes seems out of focus... She's, shall we say, rather three dimensional, and that may have contributed to shallow depth of field, but I suspect more it's soft corners from the lens being wide open.

10-15-2019, 09:27 AM - 1 Like	#4
bladerunner6 Pentaxian Join Date: Nov 2014 Photos: Albums Posts: 2,080	Originally posted by mhoule418 You had the composition right, but her eyes seems out of focus... I agree with this.

10-15-2019, 01:18 PM - 1 Like	#5
Leumas Veteran Member Join Date: Aug 2016 Posts: 454	I like the composition, and pose. I think the lighting needs improvement. Her chest (while lovely) is the brightest part and therefore the focal point. I'd have used a reflector or speed-light from the right to light her face. If you have a flexible RAW you might be able to in post.

10-15-2019, 01:20 PM	#6
The Squirrel Mafia Pentaxian Join Date: Jan 2015 Posts: 3,057	^ Indeed.

10-15-2019, 01:58 PM	#7
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146 Original Poster	Yeah, I can bring her face up for sure, and reduce the highlights on her chest too, probably, thanks for the feedback! I had forgotten to bring my reflector that day, sadly.

10-15-2019, 05:45 PM	#8
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146 Original Poster	A bit more like this, then?

10-15-2019, 06:15 PM	#9
Leumas Veteran Member Join Date: Aug 2016 Posts: 454	Much closer. Thought there's some color shifting going on with the chest giving it a greenish hue. I'd leave the chest and mostly focus on equalizing the face to match You're headed the right direction though

10-15-2019, 07:14 PM - 1 Like	#10
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146 Original Poster	One more edit.

10-19-2019, 10:58 AM	#11
ChristianRock Pentaxian Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: People's Republic of America Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 9,912	The last edit turned out pretty nice I would say. I like this style of very saturated colors though I usually don't use it for portraits. But the skin tones turned out nice in your processing.

10-19-2019, 01:57 PM	#12
kiwi_jono Loyal Site Supporter Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Christchurch, New Zealand Photos: Gallery \| Albums Posts: 2,437	Lovely composition. I largely agree with the comments here, although the rules are flexible and shot may have even worked better if the face was more OOF. But eyes in focus is the usual rule of thumb. Anyway its a great shot to have and I think with tweaks suggested is still good image.

10-19-2019, 02:42 PM	#13
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146 Original Poster	Originally posted by ChristianRock The last edit turned out pretty nice I would say. I like this style of very saturated colors though I usually don't use it for portraits. But the skin tones turned out nice in your processing. Thanks, CR! Originally posted by kiwi_jono Lovely composition. I largely agree with the comments here, although the rules are flexible and shot may have even worked better if the face was more OOF. But eyes in focus is the usual rule of thumb. Anyway its a great shot to have and I think with tweaks suggested is still good image. Thanks so much!

10-24-2019, 11:43 AM	#14
Birk Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2019 Location: Koblenz Posts: 114	I hang between the first and third picture - I found both fantastic! The first Look makes me say "wow" and it is still so. The colors, the style.... and the woman makes me forget to look of the sharp ess of her eyes. Thank you for showing, I'm not often See Portrait-Photos in this way. Best regards, Birk

10-24-2019, 12:01 PM	#15
Archimedes the Dog Site Supporter Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Boise, ID Posts: 1,146 Original Poster	Originally posted by Birk I hang between the first and third picture - I found both fantastic! The first Look makes me say "wow" and it is still so. The colors, the style.... and the woman makes me forget to look of the sharp ess of her eyes. Thank you for showing, I'm not often See Portrait-Photos in this way. Best regards, Birk Thank you very much!