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01-14-2009, 06:55 AM   #1
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Model Shoot - Critique Needed
Camera: Pentax K10d ISO: --- Shutter Speed: --- Aperture: --- 

any suggestion would make this picture getting better will be accept.




ISO : 100
Aperture : f8
Shutter : 1/250
FL : 18
Lens : DA 16-45

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ISO : 100
Aperture : f1.2
Shutter : 1/125
FL : 50
Lens : SMCP K 50mm 1.2

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Second one is best for me.
(Don't really like the first one, but can't say why.)
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Second one is best for me.
(Don't really like the first one, but can't say why.)
too much noise object in the background or the pose of my model?

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Second one works for me. The first appears to be more of a snapshot with distractions away from the model. Does that make sense? It's mostly that thing behind her head.

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Second one works for me. The first appears to be more of a snapshot with distractions away from the model. Does that make sense? It's mostly that thing behind her head.
yap!

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im still on the learning curve using wider lens than 50mm


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Number 2 works well. Number 1 loses your model in clutter and dingy darkness. This and the lightness of the left side of the picture pulls your attention away from the model.
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Number 2 works well. Number 1 loses your model in clutter and dingy darkness. This and the lightness of the left side of the picture pulls your attention away from the model.
Number 1 loses your model in clutter and dingy darkness.

im so LOL with the word you chosen

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The second shot is the keeper here. Cute expression, nicely framed. A little more light in the eyes would have helped.

The first shot... well, it does little right and much wrong. Let's start with the pose. Trying to be sexy will often come across as just plain silly. She has a large, blue fin sticking out of her head. The background is full of distraction, from the tethered pole to what looks like some sort of tracks to a fence to what looks to be the overhang of a building. She is lit somewhat darkly with no pop.... the processing lacks vibrance. Composition and depth of field lose your subject in a photographic mess. Toss this one in the bin.

But, keep the second... it's really quite good!

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The second shot is the keeper here. Cute expression, nicely framed. A little more light in the eyes would have helped.

The first shot... well, it does little right and much wrong. Let's start with the pose. Trying to be sexy will often come across as just plain silly. She has a large, blue fin sticking out of her head. The background is full of distraction, from the tethered pole to what looks like some sort of tracks to a fence to what looks to be the overhang of a building. She is lit somewhat darkly with no pop.... the processing lacks vibrance. Composition and depth of field lose your subject in a photographic mess. Toss this one in the bin.

But, keep the second... it's really quite good!
thanks hamid..

a very complete answer.

indeed, its rare for me shooting with lens wider than 50mm, so when i stumbled upon a task portraiting somebody over wide lens.. made me grasp of air because out of idea..

i need to be more careful next time, pay more attention the background..


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the second is better. maybe because i use 50mm alot before..

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You can still get close with a wide angle. For instance, one of my favorite portrait lenses is the FA 31mm 1.8 Limited... quite a bit wider than a 50. And, sometimes I'll even use the DA 14mm 2.8! Just get in close!

Keep on playing! The ideas with the new focal length will come! Happy shooting!

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thanks hamid..

a very complete answer.

indeed, its rare for me shooting with lens wider than 50mm, so when i stumbled upon a task portraiting somebody over wide lens.. made me grasp of air because out of idea..

i need to be more careful next time, pay more attention the background..


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the second is better. maybe because i use 50mm alot before..

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Model is underexposed on the first, but she looks nice on the second. You might want to add off camera flash to the first scenario.
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QuoteOriginally posted by fearview Quote
any suggestion would make this picture getting better will be accept.




ISO : 100
Aperture : f8
Shutter : 1/250
FL : 18
Lens : DA 16-45

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1. Background doesn't really work, I dont know if I would put as much emphasis on the rule of 3rds in a model shoot.

2. Lighting needs to be improved, its either underesposed or needs some fill lighting. When shooting outdoors always try to get YOU between the SUN and your MODEL/OBJECT
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when doing location shoots like this and if I don't have any light sourc to da some fill light or underexpose the background I would rather overexpose the background and have the person in perfect exposure..

for the first image, she looks underexposed.
looks like you had a lot of open field, better to find a background that don't disturb the subject. Like having things going trough the subjects head etc.

the seccond image is much better, but I would watch out for having fisted (think that is the right word) hand in front of her face. It don't look elegant for a female

Hope this helps a little.
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Model is underexposed on the first, but she looks nice on the second. You might want to add off camera flash to the first scenario.
yes..thank you. i admit it, its lack of light there. i should put some light there..


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when doing location shoots like this and if I don't have any light sourc to da some fill light or underexpose the background I would rather overexpose the background and have the person in perfect exposure..
you will sacrifice the bacground?

i was thinking about that too.. i was a bit hesitant..should i put f4 for blurring backgroun.. or try expose the sky with higher aperture..



QuoteOriginally posted by devisor Quote

for the first image, she looks underexposed.
looks like you had a lot of open field, better to find a background that don't disturb the subject. Like having things going trough the subjects head etc.

the seccond image is much better, but I would watch out for having fisted (think that is the right word) hand in front of her face. It don't look elegant for a female

Hope this helps a little.


yah thank you.


fist..fist..fist..


ill remember that.
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