[MrEspie]

This was already part of a thread I made a few days ago (which promptly got buried). I'd really appreciate some technical/artistic feedback/suggestions. I used the DA 18-55 II @ 18mm with a C-PL and developed manually with ACR. Fire away!

Well... it is nice work for an early attempt. I like that you chose a large foreground object to add "depth" to the picture.

• Compositionally, I think the (plow...?) could be at the extreme lower-right corner.
• A lot of extra empty space near the foreground, which I feel should be cropped away.
• There is considerable amount of vignetting, at least it shows on my monitor.
• Colours look a little dull and white-balance seems to be off a bit. Which can be easily fixed with an image-editing program.

This is a good Black-and-White candidate, I can try my hand at enhancing the photograph with your permission.

Hope this helps.

[MrEspie]

Alex, I believe there may be some discrepancy in the colour output of our monitors. I'm on a less brilliant screen at school right now and it is seeming rather dull (my screen at home has been calibrated somewhat with the Adobe gamma utility), though there wasn't much colour in the frame to begin with. It is, of course, early Spring where I am and thus everything is a very muted brown. :ugh: I'll have another crack at it when I get home tonight. Of course, you are most welcome to try your hand at editing it as well.

-Al

[kevinschoenmakers]

I think this picture would benefit alot by moving the horizon from halfway to a third from below. This moves the rusty piece of machinery into the sweetspot in the lower right corner, and shows us more of the brilliant blue sky.

[kevinschoenmakers]

• There is considerable amount of vignetting, at least it shows on my monitor.

The 18-55 gives some vignetting at 18mm.

OK...





Used RAWTherapee and GIMP. Tried to reduce the vignetting a little.

[axl]

the coulour crop works better, but:

I'd try to come closer to the plough and position it to the lower left corner, so the poughed part of the field would be coming from behind it (I'd try to stand bit higher and kind of look down on the plough so it wouldn't obscure whole fo the ploughed field and still keep sky) and lead viewer's eye to the blue sky from left to right...

but all in all not bad attempt

BR

[kevinschoenmakers]

I really like the cropped versions. Do you like them yourself?