[shooz]

This is an antiqued version of a photo I turned in for a class I'm taking.
I kind of felt bad about the television shot.
Hope this one makes up for it....

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[Ash]

A good attempt here.
It's technically OK other than slight front-focusing, or focusing on her hair or the tip of her nose. Get her eyes in focus most importantly. The exposure looks OK also - her R side does appear overexposed which if corrected would have deepened the shadows o her L side.

Aesthetically, the pose is difficult to engage with. Her closed eyes would have suited more with a slightly extended neck, her face kissing the sky so to speak. Otherwise, her open eyes would have been more intriguing.

The PP work is good and the setting looked fine for a good window-light portrait.
Keep at it.

[K-9]

As Ash said, it would have been more suited had she stretched her neck back, or looked upward, as this position really doesn't tell us anything why her eyes are shut. Is she playing hide and seek and counting to 10? It's just not a pleasing look. Basically, unless you're doing some sullen portrait or have some pose where it would benefit with eyes closed, keep 'em open!